yqingzky 发表于 2023-7-11 17:13   全显示 1楼
角度很独特啊，不过感觉还是差一点点意思。可能楼主不是女生，所以对于心理描写的刻画其实不是很深刻，没有感觉到那种在性爱与纯洁之前两难的局面，不够扣人心弦，其实后续可以多一点心理描写，这样代入感才强，因为心理描写是一样的，但是肉戏我们读者都是旁观，只有心理描写可以代入自己。相信这篇文章后续会变成一篇佳作
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